5th Grade - Editing And Revising

 
     
 
     
 
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5th
Writing
Editing and revising
Edit and revise manuscripts to improve the meaning and focus of writing by adding, deleting, consolidating, clarifying, and rearranging words and sentences. (evaluation and revision)
Be able to rewrite manuscripts to make them clearer by removing, modifying, and rearranging words and ideas.
 

Sample Problems

(1)

True or False: Once you have written something down on paper, you are done with it. (false)

(2)

True or False: It just wastes your time to read your paper out loud. (false)

(3)

True or False: Revision means literally to re-see. (true)

(4)

Which is the best way to join these sentences:


Dogs are better than cats. Dogs are better than hamsters.


a) Dogs are the best.

b) Dogs are better than cats, better than hamsters.

c) Dogs are better than cats and hamsters.

d) Dogs are better than hamsters and than cats.

(c)

(5)

True or False: Good writers take the time to revise their work many times. (true)

Learning Tips

(1)

Vocabulary


Revising– changing your writing to make it better for the reader, by adding details, changing words, deleting things that are not needed, or rearranging the order.


(2)

Revise, Rework, Redo


What does your teacher mean when she tells you to revise? If you already have written a rough draft, what more is there to do?


Revision means, literally, to see again. Here is an idea of the basic revision process:


1. Give yourself a little time to “forget” what you wrote the first time.

2. Then reread it from start to finish without making any marks. Did you notice anything that you think could be better?

3. Now reread it slowly, crossing out things that should be deleted and adding details where they are need.

4. Reread again and rework as needed.

5. When you think you are finished, read it out loud to yourself to make sure it’s perfect!


(3)

Things to Remember:

ARRRG! and ARMS


A.R.R.R.G. Try to remember these letters to help you revise. This method encourages you to make four types of changes:


1. Add

What else does the reader need to know?

2. Rearrange

Is the information in the most logical and most effective order?

3. Remove

What extra details or unnecessary bits of information are in this piece of writing?

4. Replace

What words or details could be replaced by clearer or stronger expressions?

5. GO BACK AND DO IT AGAIN!


Another mnemonic that can help you is:

A.R.M.S. - Add, Remove, Move Around, Substitute


(4)

More Revising Tips

  • Read your paper aloud, or have someone read it aloud to you. We often "hear" more of our errors than we see.

  • Give yourself some time between finishing writing a paper and editing and proofreading it. This lets you "re-see" the paper with rested eyes and a refreshed brain.

  • Read the paper backward -- from the end to the beginning -- one sentence (for editing) or one word (for proofreading) at a time. This helps you concentrate on sentences and words rather than on the paper's meaning as a whole.

  • Use two pieces of blank white paper to cover all but one sentence at a time. This helps reduce visual noise and keeps you from being distracted by other sentences.

  • Deliberately set aside time for proofreading, just as you set aside time for research and writing.

  • Build editing and proofreading into your writing process at the best place for you. Many writers like to leave it for last so that they can concentrate on their ideas first.

  • Good writers don't necessarily know all the grammar and punctuation "rules," but they know where to go to find them using resources like dictionaries, thesauri, and handouts from your writing teacher.

  • Keep resources handy when you write so that you aren't tempted to guess about how to correct your errors.

  • Ask other writers to listen to you read your paper and mark it up or to read your paper as you listen. Good writers know they don’t have to do it all alone.

  • Know and keep a list of errors you make often so that you know what to look for in your papers.

  • Read your paper a few times for one of those errors at a time rather than reading your paper once only and trying to catch all of your errors in one pass.

(5)

Questions to Help you Revise


Ask yourself these questions to help you revise:


  • Does every word and action count? There should be a reason why a character acts or speaks in a certain way.

  • Is the series of events logical? Do they relate?

  • Is it clear what your goal or your main character's goal is throughout the piece of writing?

  • Are the words you use to describe characters and events vivid? * Is your train of thought clear? Are there any tangents?

  • Do you use a variety of verbs throughout the piece?

  • Do you use something besides "said” for dialogue

  • Is it too wordy?

  • Are you repeating the same words and phrases over and over again?

  • Does your introduction “hook” your audience?

  • Does the conclusion leave the reader thinking?

  • Are all sentences complete or are there sentence fragments?

  • Did you use a thesaurus?


Extra Help Problems

(1)

Which is the best way to join these two sentences:


An important person in my life is my big sister. She is Sarah.


a) A important person in my life is Sarah, my big sister.

b) A important person in my life is my big sister and Sarah

is who she is.

c) In my life a important person is my big sister and she

is Sarah.

d) My big sister Sarah is a important person, she is in my

life.

(a)

(2)

The underlined phrase should be replaced with which phrase below?


She helps me with my homework.


a) She were helping

b) She have helped

c) She help

d) She helps

(d)

(3)

True or False: Revising is making decisions about how you want to improve your writing. (true)

(4)

True or False: Revising is finding places where your writing could be clearer, more interesting, more informative and more convincing. (true)

(5)

It’s a good idea to read your paper _______ since we often hear more errors than we see. (out loud or aloud)

(6)

True or False: You only have to read through your paper once to revise it. (false)

(7)

True or False: As soon as you are done with the rough draft, you should turn around and immediately begin revising it. (false)

(8)

True or False: Give yourself some time between finishing writing a paper and editing and proofreading it. (true)

(9)

Read your essay _______, from the end to the beginning, will help you concentrate on the sentences and words to find errors. (backward)

(10)

True or False: Use two pieces of blank white paper to cover all but one sentence at a time is a good technique to help you focus on only that sentence and not get distracted. (true)

(11)

You should set aside _____ to revise, just like you build in time for research and writing the first draft. (time)

(12)

True or False: Good writers know all the grammar and punctuation rules. (false)

(13)

True or False: Good writers never need to look things up in a dictionary. (false)

(14)

True or False: It’s a good idea to keep resources like a dictionary or thesaurus at hand when you revise. (true)

(15)

True or False: It’s not okay to ask someone to read your paper to help you find errors. (false)

(16)

True or False: Good writers do everything by themselves. (false)

(17)

True or False: Good writers are able to find all their errors in one pass of revision, (false)

(18)

True or False: A thesaurus should never be used when you revise. (false)

(19)

True or False: Sometimes you may have to rearrange whole sentences or paragraph to get the logic and flow in the right order. (true)

(20)

True or False: It’s a good idea to replace overused or commonplace words with ones that are more descriptive. (true)

(21)

True or False: It’s okay to use a word like said or walked many times in a paper. (false)

(22)

What does ARRRG stand for? (Add, Rearrange, Remove, Replace, GO BACK AND DO IT AGAIN)

(23)

What does ARMS stand for? (Add, Remove, Move Around, Substitute)

(24)

True or False: If you don’t know where to begin revision, a checklist of questions is a good place to start. (true)

(25)

The underlined phrase should be replaced with which phrase below?


Playing ball was the funnest thing we did today.


a) more fun

b) funnerest

c) most fun

d) fun

(c)

 

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